Correct the errors in the following sentence:
There were a lot of applauses at the oscars; and they had rose most when the winner of the best movie had been announced and them receiving the direct was going to the stage as quick as possible.
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There was a lot of applause at the Oscars; the loudest of which was when the winner of the best movie was announced; who, upon receiving the signal, went to the stage as quickly as possible.
MAYA: There are some good changes here, but you need to think about the punctuation;-)
There was a lot of applause at the Oscars; they mostly rose when the winner of the best movie was announced, and when he received the direction, he went to the stage as quick as possible.
There were a lot of applauses at the Oscars; the loudest rose upon announcement of the winner of the best movie who rushed to the stage at the signal.
There was a lot of applause at the Oscar; the loudest rose upon announcement of the winner of the best movie who rushed to the stage at the signal.
There was a lot of applause at the Oscar; they raised most when the winner of the best movie was announced and then to receive it directly, the winner was going to the stage as quick as possible.
When the winner of the best movie was announced at the Oscars, there was a lot of applause, and then to receive it directly, the winner was going to the stage as quick as possible.
Stephanie: You've made the sentence much more grammatically correct. Great! Stylistically it's a run-on sentence, however. There are too many short clauses strung together.
Julie: I see that you corrected the one wrong word form and make it all correct. Good.
Uzma: Changing the sentence structure the way you did was a good idea. That's effective. There's one word form that's incorrect, and the sentence is over punctuated with too many commas.
When the winner of the best movie was announced at the Oscars, there was a lot of applause and then to receive it directly the winner went to the stage as quick as possible.
There was a lot of applause at the Oscars;and they mostly rose when the winner of the best movie was announced,he went to the stage as quickly as possible,when he recieved the direction.
Ther was a lot of applause at the Oscars;and they mostly rose when the winner of the best movie was announced,he went to the stage as quickly as possible,when he recieved the direction.
UZMA: A good try--you have an adejctive form rather than the adverb you need;-)
JAYA: You're on the right track, but there are a few things to think about here: noun-pronoun agreement, word form, and punctuation;-)
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