This exercise is advanced sentence combining; it is designed for students who have completed Lesson 9 in the course.
Sentence 1: The spring equinox, when daylight and night-time hours are equal, occurs on March 21st.
Sentence 2: It is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring.
Sentence 3: There is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
1. Use a gerund
2. Use an appositive to combine the sentences.
3. Use a relative pronoun to combine the sentences.
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1. Occurring on March 21st, the spring equinox is when daylight and night-time hours are equal; in addition, it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring and there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
2.The spring equinox occurs on March 21 because it is when daylight and night-time hours are equal; moreover, it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring, but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
3. The spring equinox that occurs on March 21 when daylight and night-time hours are equal; also, it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring, but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
Sara: #1--Yes but your transitions need work--in particular "and" is inappropriate; #2--good; #3--you have used a relativepronoun, but that first clause is a dependent one, so you can't use a semicolon after it.
Let me try #1 and #3 again.
1. Occurring on March 21st, the spring equinox is when daylight and night-time hours are equal; in addition, it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
3. The spring equinox that occurs on March 21 when daylight and night-time hours are equal. Thus, it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring, but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
In Athabasca, with lots of snow still on the ground (appositive), seeing the days getting longer(gerund) in the spring because of the equinox, which (relative pronoun) occurs on March 21st, when daylight and night-time hours are equal,is always good.
Sara: #1--good; #3--that first sentence is a fragment, and you arfe supposed to combine the sentences into one;-)
Kerry: OK--but the intention is to write three different sentences so that you are looking at three different ways to combine these sentences.
3. The spring equinox that occurs on March 21 when daylight and night-time hours are equal, and thus, it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring, but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
Sara: What you have here is a phrase + dependent clause to introduce your sentence; therefore "and thus" doesn't make sense as you would use this between two independent clauses.
3. The spring equinox that occurs on March 21 when daylight and night-time hours are equal, and it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring, but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
Sara: That still doesn't solve the problem:-(
Another try:
3. The spring equinox that occurs on March 21 when daylight and night-time hours are equal. It is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring, but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
Sara: You haven't fixed the basic problem--that first clause/sentence is a dependent one. You need an independent clause for it to make , and you need to end up with just one sentence;-)
Veronica, I'll try again. I hope this is correct.
3. The daylight and night-time hours are equal when the spring equinox occurs on March 21 which means it is always good to see the days getting longer with the spring, but there is still lots of snow on the ground in Athabasca.
Sara: Finally :-)
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