Friday, April 23, 2010

SENTENCE COMBINATION, Apr. 23rd, 2010

Learning to combine ideas into more complex sentences is an important skill in writing. There are many ways to do this--many possible bonus points! Try to combine the following three sentences.

Sentence 1: The Immigrant Access Fund provides loans for internationally trained immigrants.
Sentence 2: Many immigrant professionals find it hard to pursue their careers in Canada because of accreditation difficulties.
Sentence 3: The loans help pay the costs associated with accreditation, training, or upgrading.

7 comments:

Julie said...

Many immigrant professionals would find hard to pursue their careers in Canada without The Immigrant Access Fund who provides loans for internationally trained immigrants, used to help paying the costs associated with accreditation, training, or upgrading.

Julie said...

Many immigrant professionals would find hard to pursue their careers in Canada without the loans provided by The Immigrant Access Fund, which can be used to help them paying the costs associated with accreditation, training, or upgrading.

Veronica Baig said...

JULIE: The second version is much better, but note some errors:
1. would find IT hard to do (something)
2. to help them PAY.

Saadat said...

Many immigrant professionals find it hard to pursue their careers in Canada; however, the Immigration Access Fund provides loans for internationally trained immigrants in order to help pay the costs associated with accreditation, training, or upgrading.

Veronica Baig said...

SAADAT: it's a proper noun, so you can't change "Immigrant Access Fund"; otherwise, the sentence is good.

Unknown said...

The Immigrant Access Fund provides loans that help pay the costs associated with accreditation, training, or upgradingfor for the many internationally trained professional immigrants who find it hard to pursue their careers in Canada because of accreditation difficulties.

Veronica Baig said...

INGRID: A good answer:-)