Sentence 1: The French were the first Europeans to settle in what is now
Sentence 2: Many of the British who came to
Sentence 3: The American War of Independence prompted many Loyalists to leave the colonies and head for
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Although the French were the first Europeans to settle in what is now Canada, many English speaking colonists occupied the country, whose arrival can be traced back to the waves of the British colonization of New England, as well as the migration of the Loyalists after the American war while still under British control.
Though the French were the first Europeans to settle in what is now Canada,
the American War of Independence prompted many Loyalists to leave the colonies and head for Canada as it was still under British control, which came to Canada after they went to the New England colonies.
Julie: Something is misplaced in your sentence. A clause does not modify the word if follows; instead, if modifies something else.
Uzma: Your sentence is great up until the last clause. Can you rearrange the last part to make it fit better?
Though the French were the first Europeans to settle in what is now Canada,the American War of Independence prompted many Loyalists to leave the colonies and head for Canada which was still under British control who came to Canada after they went to the New England colonies.
Although French were the first Europeans to settle in what is now Canada, the American War of Independent prompted many Loyalists to leave the colonies and head for Canada that it was still under British control, who went to the New England colonies before they came to Canada.
UZMA:You still haven't fixed the problem that Tamara identified;-)
SAADAT:You start out quite well, but then you seem to lose track of the idea in the middle--note the word form problem (independent) and your use of 'that'.
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